This I Believe Essay

Outline:
-Introduction
-Main Topic (This I believe: I am on the right track in life)
-Why have I felt like I am not on the right track?
——(over thinker)
——(everything has to be perfect)
-Examples from this semester:
Confident in classes (specific classes related to my future career)
Year I graduate
(Life it is so much more than school too)
-Conclusion (Revisit all examples I stated)

Draft 1:

This I Believe Essay: I Am on The Right Track in Life
I have always been someone who overthinks a lot, it can get to a point where I feel like I am not on the right track with everything that I do. Or that something bad is going to happen to me, because things have been going so good in life. The thought process of “I have been doing so good, something bad has to occur”. As this first semester of college is ending, I realize how much I have grown as someone that believes in themselves. I realize that things are going well because I am on the right track, I am where I want to be. I don’t have to keep thinking that something bad will happen, and if it does that is life.

I have always been someone who would consider themselves to be a perfectionist. Everything has to go a certain way, or else it will not work out. I believe I have grown out of the phase and I am accepting things as they will come in my life.

This first semester I took classes that I was really interested in,
Deviance and Crime and Forensic Eyewitness Interviews. Both of these classes have made me realize that I am learning things that I will take with me when I eventually become a police officer. I am learning how to properly interview someone, which will be very beneficial for me in a few years. I know that I am learning the tools needed for my future career. This is making me excited and a little nervous, but everything will work out.

I have to also realize the amount of work I put in to get where I am right now. I took 10 college classes in high school to get ahead, and I have to always be proud of myself for doing that. I was the one that put in all of that extra work, nobody else completed those classes for me, it was just me. I have to always be proud of myself for completing those courses, I need to be proud of myself for working hard for my future career while I was still in high school. No one can take that education that I gained away from me.

To conclude, I can finally say that I believe that I am where I should be in life. I should stop thinking that I need to be in a father state of life, or should be doing more. Being in college is a big success, and I have to stop thinking that I need to be in a different stage of life. I can confidently say that I am where I should be. I am on the right path to where I want to go in life, and I need to enjoy this stage of my life while I can.

Draft 2:

This I Believe Essay: I Am on The Right Track in Life
I have always been someone who overthinks a lot, it can get to a point where I feel like I am not on the right track with everything that I do. I always think that something bad is going to happen to me, because things have been going so good in life. I would think “I have been doing so good, something bad has to occur”. As this first semester of college is ending, I realize how much I have grown, I can say that I am someone that believes in themselves. I realize that things are going well because I am on the right track, I am right where I want to be in life. I shouldn’t have the thought process that something bad will happen, and it does that in life in general. Everyone is going to have ups and downs in life.

I have always been someone who would consider themselves to be a perfectionist. Everything has to go a certain way, or else it will not work out. I believe I have grown out of the phase this semester and I am accepting things as they will come.

I have to also realize the amount of work I put in to get where I am right now. I took 10 college classes in high school to get ahead, and I have to always be proud of myself for doing that. I was the one that put in all of that extra work, nobody else completed those classes for me. I have to always be proud of myself for completing those courses, I need to be proud of myself for working hard for my future career while I was still in high school. No one can take that education that I gained away from me.

Peer Review:

Having a peer review was very successful for me. I am going to add more about my future goals, and where my end goals are. I also need to edit my essay more and get rid of any repeating phrases. I have more room to maybe add more of a personal story on why I have the goals that I do.

Final Draft:

I Am on The Right Track in Life

I have always been someone who overthinks a lot, it can get to a point where I feel like I am not on the right track with everything that I do. I always think that something bad is going to happen to me, because things have been going so good in life. I would think “I have been doing so good, something bad has to occur”. As this first semester of college is ending, I realize how much I have grown. I can say that I am someone that believes in themselves in a way I haven’t before. I realize that things are going well because I am on the right track, I am right where I should be in life. I shouldn’t have the thought process that something bad will happen, and if it does, that in life in general.

I would also consider myself to be a perfectionist. Everything has to go a certain way, or else it will not work out. I believe I have grown out of the phase this semester and I am accepting things as they come.

This first semester I took classes that I was really interested in, like Deviance and Crime and Forensic Eyewitness Interviews. Both of these classes have made me realize that I am learning things that I will take with me when I eventually become a police officer and one day go to the FBI. My goal is to help with human trafficking, a cause that I believe needs to be helped more in our society. I have always wanted to reach this goal, my whole life I wanted to be in law enforcement. Learning how to properly interview someone will be very beneficial for me in a few years. I know that I am learning the tools needed for my future career. This is making me excited and a little nervous, but I know everything will work out.

I have to also realize the amount of work I put in to get where I am right now. I took 10 college classes in high school to get ahead, and I have to always be proud of myself for that. I was the one that put in all of that extra work, nobody else completed those classes for me. I need to be proud of myself for working hard for my future career while I was still in high school. No one can take that education that I gained away from me.

To conclude, I can finally say that I believe that I am where I should be in life. I should stop thinking that I need to be in a farther state of life, or should be doing more. Being in college is a big success, I can confidently say that I am where I should be. I am on the right path to reach my goals, and I need to enjoy this stage of my life while I can.

Reflection as a Whole:

Over time, I have seen how my essay turned into something that I am proud to submit. In the beginning of this project, I was unsure what I was going to write about. Then I thought of ways I have grown this semester. I realized that I am not as hard on myself this semester, when times I would be, especially in high school. I have changed the way I think about my successes and failures. I realized I don’t need to think that I need to do more, I am exactly where I need to be at this moment.

It was easy to say what I wanted to say in my essay, but it was so helpful to get other classmates’ opinions on it during peer review. The most helpful part of this process was definitely when classmates reviewed my essay. Peer review was very helpful to see what parts needed to be described more or ideas I could add more onto. It was also very helpful to read my essay out loud. As I did this, I saw that I repeated a lot of phrases, and I went back and fixed those. I added more details to certain things and explained my goals more, this made my essay complete. I believe I said everything I needed to say for this project, I am proud of the final draft that I submitted.